Post Pitch notes.... for Tuesday!

GREAT JOB EVERYONE!! I think it went over really well; I think it will be even better on Tuesday.

Here are some of the notes that Rach took during our pitch.... I think I got everything down that Natalie commented on to add/change. Check out where your name is so you know what to work on to improve our pitch package for Tuesday. [It looked pretty awesome though, if ya ask me!]

***Our next meeting will be with DQ on Monday at 5PM - we should show him what we have on this and pitch it to him again.

Please post as things are done or if you have questions!
Thanks guyzers!
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Natalie comments on package:

> cover page - good, nice and colourful, says our group name, etc
**add short descriptions below story beats [STACE]
> beat board 1 - too dark, make lighter too see better [STACE]
- I like the names labelling who did what artwork
> beat board 2 - I like this version of the god, generic
- good telling of the story, god works in clouds, you can see ox in back, distracted [also have board/sequence of him and tail playing x's and o's - BROCK]
> beat board 3 - have better version where can see ox's face/expression looking at the animals laughing at him [BROCK]
> add a beat in here of ox getting the message from emporer [JASON]
> beat 4 good [marks who me ox]
> add a beat of tail making him mess up message - MARK
> beat 5 good [brocks announcing one]
> add beat of emporer coming down to reem him out [KELLY] [change colour of ox here to gray]
> beat 6 good - change colour of ox to gray [BROCK] [brocks sunny one]
> change colour of ox to brown on beat 7, also add characters more in active poses [straight poses are bad! static] - MARK
> protag 1 - show the designs by mark with the tail interacting - colour them RACH [I can place them on page, cut out STACE]
> protag 2/3 - show other coloured designs - reearrange [STACE]
> add page of tail poses to see how it will act [BROCK]
> antag - start with andy's poses as char design -rearrange, fix - add in Rachs designs [STACE]
> colour other poses [alex's - ALEX]
> environs - more lush, more dry, more contrast/before and after like kellys temple idear... expand on that sort of thing.... lush/dry fields, etc...need layouts of heaven as well [GUS, RACH]
> secondary char - change to BARE clothes.... more primitive [similar to andy and alex's] [ANDY, STACE, KELLY...and whoever else wants to do a peasant in basic clothes]
> props - more of them, more ancient, primitive like the plough - tools, clothes, BARE minimum/basics for all these things [ALEX, GUS, RACH, STACE, ANGIE]
> research - gather/put together more research pages for all characters, environs, props.... [EVERYONE to POST PICS...STACE to assemble]


other comments from natalie
- work with the tail - make sure to establish the tail at the beginning/dumb ox
- dont make tail tremendously bitter, whip him to make harder - get the relationship down
- more before and after boards showing dullness of earth turned to lushness... bareness of huts - what would they make/build with?
- have fun with foliage, show more lushness after message is given!