'The emperor heard their pleas and grew concerned to hear his subjects so downtrodden'.How about 'The emperor, hearing their pleas, grew concerned about his downtrodden subjects.' Or something so that we don't have the word 'hear' twice.
Hmm... good idea... I didn't catch that. [My brain feels slightly fried!]I will change it, thanks Angie!
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'The emperor heard their pleas and grew concerned to hear his subjects so downtrodden'.
How about 'The emperor, hearing their pleas, grew concerned about his downtrodden subjects.' Or something so that we don't have the word 'hear' twice.
Hmm... good idea... I didn't catch that. [My brain feels slightly fried!]
I will change it, thanks Angie!
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